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Please correct this email. Thank you! Part 2    Third, journalism experience. To make myself closer to this programme, I tried my best to get more journalism experience. For example, I have an internship in China Daily for more than three months. I chose this newspaper because it is the only national English newspaper, which could provide me with international journalism experience and help me understand O better. It turns out that I did learn a lot in this experience, as you can see in my three English work samples. What I did has been far better than other interns in this newspaper, because I worked very hard with O as a goal. Beside my internship in China Daily, I worked as a journalist and editor in the official media of my university for more than six months and wrote news for my student club. From the effort I made and what I stated in my application reflections, I hope you can feel my strong motivation.   Forth, my university. My university X University is one of the 39 universities of Project 985, which means it is one of the top universities of China. As one of the students of this university, I believe I am competitive.  Five, academic reference and journalistic reference. My two referees know me well and I believe they have carefully been shown you how I fit into this programme in their detailed reference letters. Sixth, language. My grade of IELTS test is 7. (reading 7.5, listening 7.5, speaking 6, writing 6) I talked to the Chinese offer holders of O of 2021 to compare our background. I believe my GPA, academic background and professional background are as competitive as theirs. I know it's said in the email that “due to the limited number of places”, but there must be some concrete aspect that I am not good enough compared with others, which caused me to be rejected. Could you tell me by consulting the admission officers or selecting scoring record? I want to make up for this shortcoming before the next application.
4 Thg 04 2021 07:30
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Please correct this email. Thank you! Part 2 Third, journalism experience. To align myself more closely with this programme, I have tried my best to get more journalism experience. For example, I have had an internship at China Daily for more than three months. I chose this newspaper because it is the only national English newspaper in China, which means it can provide me with international journalism experience and help me understand O better. It turns out that I have learnt a lot from this experience, as you can see in my three English work samples. What I did has been far better than the other interns at this newspaper , because I worked very hard with O as a goal. Beside my internship in China Daily, I worked as a journalist and editor in the official media of my university for more than six months and wrote news for my student club. From the effort I made and what I stated in my application reflections, I hope you can feel my strong motivation. Forth, my university. My university X University is one of the 39 universities of Project 985, which means it is one of the top universities of China. As one of the students of this university, I believe I am competitive. Five, academic reference and journalistic reference. My two referees know me well and I believe they have carefully been shown you how I fit into this programme in their detailed reference letters. Sixth, language. My grade of IELTS test is 7. (reading 7.5, listening 7.5, speaking 6, writing 6) I talked to the Chinese offer holders of O of 2021 to compare our background. I believe my GPA, academic background and professional background are as competitive as theirs. I know it's said in the email that “due to the limited number of places”, but there must be some concrete aspect that I am not good enough compared with others, which caused me to be rejected. Could you tell me by consulting the admission officers or selecting scoring record? I want to make up for this shortcoming before the next application.
The above is too long to edit so I have started from here. I have learnt a lot from this experience, as you can see from my three English work samples. What I did has been far better than the other interns at this newspaper (do you have evidence for this), because I worked very hard with O as a goal. Beside my internship with China Daily, I worked both as a journalist and editor in the official media of my university for more than six months and wrote news for my student club. From the efforts I made and what I stated in my application, I hope you can sense my strong motivation. Forth, my university. X University is one of the 39 universities of Project 985, which means it is one of the top universities of China. As one of the students of this university, I believe I am competitive (is being competitive relevant?). Five, academic reference and journalistic reference. My two referees know me well and I believe they have carefully shown you how I fit into this programme in their detailed reference letters. Sixth, language. My IELTS test grade is 7 overall. (reading 7.5, listening 7.5, speaking 6, writing 6) Finally, I have talked to the Chinese students who hold offers to O for 2021 to compare our backgrounds. I believe my GPA, academic background and professional background are as competitive as theirs. I know it said in the email that my application was declined “due to the limited number of places”, but there must be some concrete aspect which meant that I was not good enough compared with others. I should be most grateful if you could tell me by consulting the admission officers or selecting scoring record? (I don't know what you mean by 'selecting scoring record). If possible I would like to make up for my shortcomings before the next round of applications. Without knowing exactly what O is, it is not possible to give correct English at those points.
4 tháng 4 năm 2021
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