Story 7/22/2014

After months of hunting, the infamous pickpocket John was finally caught had his collar felt by the detective.
The elated detective issued a penalty to John - a fine of 100 dollar pounds.
John dug into his pocket to see if there was anything in and go through it. Unfortunately he could only produce 80 pounds.
John shrugged and reluctantly handed over his only 80 pounds reluctantly to the detective and said "Well, Sorry, there are the only this is all the money I have."
The detective was vexed. After a moment of silence, he frowned and unwillingly said unwillingly, "I will release you for 3 hours, please come back within the time period and pay up the full penalty charge."

Good! 

-I have moved the adverbs "reluctantly" and "unwillingly" to a more common position. What you had written did sort of make sense, but it read in a strange way. Sometimes it's best to stick to what you know is correct - with the adverb coming before the verb it relates to

-Don't use a capital letter after a comma

-Money is an <em>uncountable</em> noun in English and we therefore say <em>much money</em>. Coins and notes, however, are <em>countable</em> nouns and we can have <em>many coins </em>and <em>many notes</em>. <em></em>