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Sunday afternoon Yesterday afternoon I drove to my parents house, which is located near to the sea. They live in a small village placed in the north of the country. When I was arriving there, I was surprised by a storm, and I had to stop my car as I was afraid of having an accident, altough there were not much traffic in that road as people were having a rest. Nevertheless, it was raining strongly, and wind blew with a lot of strenght. A little time later, an other car stopped next to mine, and then a young man came to me and asked for me some money. His clothes seemed very old, even his trousers were broken, he looked like dirty, a poor young man who needed some drug to be calm. I felt sorrow, but I didn't give anything to him, I wanted to scape, to arrive at my parentis house, but I thought about coming back home because it was a bit late already, and this morning I had to go to work. Finally, the storm stopped and I could come back home without having an accident or problems with the young man, however, I couldn't see my parents, who I hadn't seen since a lot of time ago.
25 Thg 11 2014 00:13
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Sunday afternoon

Yesterday afternoon I drove to my parents house, which is located near to the sea. They live in a small village placed situated in the north of the country.

When I was arriving there <em>(sounds awkward)</em>, During my drive there, I was surprised caught off-guard by a storm. (run-on sentense) and Although there wasn't even much traffic, I had decided to stop my car because I was afraid of having an accident (I changed the order so it flows a little more) , altough there were was not much traffic in that road as people were having a rest. Nevertheless (out of place "nevertheless"), it was raining strongly pouring rain, and the wind blew with a lot of strenght.

A little time later (better: "Later on,"), a car stopped next to mine. and then a A young man came out to me and asked for me for some money. His clothes seemed very old, even his trousers were broken. He looked like dirty, a poor young man who needed some drugs to be calm.

I felt sorrow sorry for him, but I didn't give him anything to him. I wanted to escape and arrive at my parentis house already. I even thought about going back home because it was a bit late already, and this morning I had to go to work. I would have to be at work in the morning.

Finally, the storm stopped and I could come back home without having an accident or problems with the young man; however, I couldn't see my parents, who and I hadn't seen them since for a lot of time ago. 

25 tháng 11 năm 2014
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