Marina
First entry Well this is my very first diary. I'm seventeen years old from Japan. I'm really willing to improve my English more and more! It rained quite a lot today, so I didn't feel good today. Hope it will be sunny tomorrow.
20 Thg 04 2015 13:51
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"First entry

Well this is my very first diary (diary: 日記; is that what you meant?). I'm seventeen years old from Japan. I'm really willing to improve my English more and more!
It rained quite a lot today, so I didn't feel good today. I hope it will be sunny tomorrow."

 

-> You don't need to repeat the "today"! You can either say:

-It rained quite a lot today, so I didn't feel good.

or

-It rained quite a lot, so I didn't feel good today.

 

 

We have similar names! How fun! One of my best friends is called Marina too! (•͈ᴗ•͈✿)

20 tháng 4 năm 2015

First entry

Well this is my very first diary. I'm seventeen years old from Japan. I'm really willing to improve my English more and more!
It rained quite a lot today, so I didn't feel good today. Hope it will be sunny tomorrow.

Overall, this is nice! But don't repeat "today" if we know the main subject!

22 tháng 4 năm 2015

First Entry

Well this is my very first diary. I'm seventeen years old, and I'm from Japan. I'm really willing to improve my English more.
It rained quite a lot today, so I didn't feel good. Hope it will be sunny tomorrow.

 

Overall, pretty good! Keep up the good work :D

20 tháng 4 năm 2015
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