Sergey
Childrens Palaces I smashed against the asphalt painted childrens palaces . My arm became firmer, and my step became drastic . But something was wrong , I can not hide in the tower of my dreams already.
4 Thg 10 2015 06:32
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Children's Palaces

I smashed painted children's palaces against the asphalt. My arm became firmer, and my step became drastic. But something was wrong; I cannot hide in the tower of my dreams anymore.

 

Note #1: Though I made grammar corrections, there are some usage questions I cannot answer without knowing the original text. Specifically, it would be unusual to say that one's arm became "firmer" or that one's step became "drastic."

 

Note #2: It would also be correct to say: "But something was wrong. I cannot hide in the tower of my dreams anymore." Using ";" instead of "." just emphasizes the close relation between the two sentences.

15 tháng 10 năm 2015
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