1 have an innate passion for cinema Innate is incorrect as it refers to something you are born with. "I have the innate ability of playing music by ear". You would in this case say "I have a passion for watching films" 2 the last two summers i have been working as a ticket clerk for August live theatre Correct. You need to capitalise August Live Theatre as it's a place name. 3 riding through (= travelling) the castle gates is like make a time journey.. although not in an Outlander style ( the movie) "riding through the castle gates is like travelling back in time" The mention of Outlander is unnecessary unless you were already talking about Outlander just before this sentence" 4 for me it was the most memorable event in my last visit days ago. This is incorrect but needs more context to correct it. 5 walk among the stalls in the fair "Walk among the stalls at the fair"